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Short Story: The Ancient Song: Part II


The Ancient Song

Read Part I

Part II:

With her mind racing fast, Tia called Adam, Michael’s brother to see what’s got into him to be drinking at 6:00 a.m in the morning. Time was of the essence and she had a bigger fish to fry.

She paced around the room, finding the chirping birds an annoyance. She needed absolute silence to put her mind to work. After breakfast, she sat quietly for a while, putting her thoughts in order. Left Michael a text and focused on the mystery in hand.

She recited the verse that the man had spoken, absorbing it.

‘the birds sang the ancient song,
the final wave is coming along,

the one responsible for undoing the wrong, 
should return the rose where it belongs.’

The first line:

‘The birds sang the ancient song’…

Deduction: Since it’s all about me, as he implied, then the ancient song could mean a childhood lullaby that has been passed on in the family but then the birds don’t make sense. Could the birds be the members of the family?

The second line: 

‘the final wave is coming along’…

Deduction: Could it mean death or could it mean a certain event?
This one thing must be common to all the members for it to connect with the first line so that rules out death as grandma is alive and well.

The day was passing by at the rate of 15 hours a day.

The third line: 

‘the one responsible for undoing the wrong’…

Deduction: If I’m the one, then could it have something to do with any of my previous cases. Of course, what else could it be! But then, the interpretation of the other lines would be meaningless.
Could it be related to my parents? Should I talk to Grammy about it?

She was in an entirely different league from her family. Her parents were scientists who died when an experiment went wrong when she was 10 years old. Her grandma took her in and raised her. At the age of 19, she moved out and went on to pursue her dream of becoming a detective.

She set that thought aside and focused on the final line:

‘should return the rose where it belongs’…

Deduction: This one’s the simplest of all. He wants something that I have which should be returned to the place where it belongs.

With the dusk falling, she had her deductions but the one thing that still troubled her was ‘the wrong’ in the verse.

With her fourth cup of coffee in her hand, she looked at the saffron sky wondering what she has got herself into this time around. When the phone rang, she took a deep breath and readied herself for another strange conversation.

‘I assume you already have a theory.’ said the deep voice, with a strange playfulness which got on her nerves.

‘You’re damn right I do but it doesn’t make any sense, at all.’ she spoke, carefully.

‘Well, I hope you’re as good as people say because you don’t have time to play around.’ she heard him say while she wished she could knock that smirk off his face.

‘Instead of doubting my ability, it’d be better if you tell me what’s going on here and who exactly are you?’ she spat back.

‘My identity isn’t your concern. A life is in danger. And you’re the only one who can save the tragedy from happening.
‘ his tone changed, entirely.

‘Who’s life is in danger? And how do you know about it?’ her heart raced.

the one that hides in a disguise
is found at the ninth hour from sunrise
the rose shall return to its fate
find the way before it’s too late’ recited the deep voice, again.

‘Another one?!’ gosh, not again.

’24 hours remain.’ he spoke the final words.

‘Wait!’ and the line went dead.

To Be Continued…

Read Part III

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Until next time,
Be kind to one another.
Bye Bye! 🙂

Radhika Mundra

Radhika Mundra is an aspiring writer, a lifestyle blogger and an intense storyteller.


  1. Karishma Maheshwari

    ooh! an intriguing piece.
    waiting for the next one 🙂

    21 . May . 2016
  2. Navneet Mittal

    This is not accepted.. Already, the you've posted it 24Hrs late.. now again 24hrs to wait.. >_<
    Curiosity at its peak.. A lot of permutation n combinations running through my mind..

    21 . May . 2016
  3. Sara imes

    It's getting really good. Waiting for the next part. Can't wait to see how it ends. Really good writing

    21 . May . 2016
  4. T R Gowthama

    I'm loving it. Wonderfully written.

    21 . May . 2016
  5. Mithila Menezes

    I'm totally loving this series. A detective who gets a bunch of poems as clues? It really is interesting!

    21 . May . 2016
  6. Radhika Mundra

    Thanks, Chotu! Wait till tomorrow! 🙂

    21 . May . 2016
  7. Radhika Mundra

    Haha, be patient Navneet! You're welcome to post your theory! 😀

    21 . May . 2016
  8. Radhika Mundra

    Thanks so much, Sara! 🙂

    21 . May . 2016
  9. Radhika Mundra

    Thanks so much, Gowthama! 🙂

    21 . May . 2016
  10. Radhika Mundra

    Thanks so much, Mithila! Glad you enjoyed it! Do stop by often. 🙂

    21 . May . 2016
  11. V ickie

    How long before the next?

    21 . May . 2016
  12. Alana

    So, now what? Hasn't fitured out the first, now has a second to figure out. She had better be a good detective, given she only has 24 hours to solve the mystery.

    21 . May . 2016
  13. Jyotirmoy Sarkar

    Again continued !!…

    22 . May . 2016
  14. Corinne Rodrigues

    The clock is ticking….better get part 3 out before the suspense kills us! 😉

    22 . May . 2016
  15. Radhika Mundra

    Just a few hours! 🙂

    23 . May . 2016
  16. Radhika Mundra

    Oh, this one's making her mind on a whirlwind. Let's wait and see what it does to her. 🙂

    23 . May . 2016
  17. Radhika Mundra

    Haha, yeah. Just a little more wait. 🙂

    23 . May . 2016
  18. Radhika Mundra

    Not long before it's out. 😀

    23 . May . 2016
  19. vishal bheeroo

    What a compelling narration Radhika. It's turning out to be a thriller and very engaging to the core.

    If you find time, do read my interview with Ramona:

    25 . May . 2016
  20. Mrigank Singhal

    Ultimate piece of writing and mystery 😀
    Even I am writing something like this as murder mystery..but quite slow in writing as compared to you 😛
    Its just awesome 🙂

    25 . May . 2016
  21. Mrigank Singhal

    Ultimate piece of writing and mystery 😀
    Even I am writing something like this as murder mystery..but quite slow in writing as compared to you 😛
    Its just awesome 🙂

    25 . May . 2016
  22. Parul

    Super! With those verses, looks like this deep voice person is also a blogger/poet 🙂 Well done! Heading over to part III 🙂

    26 . May . 2016
  23. Sweety Shinde

    Gets more intriguing. You sure are getting into the skin of characters. This reminds me of our Jenny days

    01 . Sep . 2016
  24. Radhika Mundra

    Thanks, Mrigank. I'm pretty sure yours will turn out real cool, we all have different styles, don't we? 🙂

    03 . Sep . 2016
  25. Duane

    Aha! The plot thickens

    28 . Jul . 2017

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